unit 3 disscousin

write only 4 paragraphs

Revise your initial individual project for Unit 1 to improve the content of your essay , sentence structure and word choices

Your revision of the content of your essay should demonstrate changes which help improve your introductory paragraph , thesis statement , body paragraphs , and concluding paragraphs . Your goal is to revise to achieve effective organization , unity , support , and coherence in your essay Once you have revised the content of your essay , revise sentences and word choices to improve the tone and style of your writing . Finally proofread and edit

your essay for errors in grammar , punctuation , and spelling . Complete the following

Complete the following

Write a brief paragraph explaining how these changes improved your essay . Be specific about the overall revisions you made to improve the content and sentences in your essay

Attach your revised essay to your post for your entry on the discussion board

Critique one peer 's revised essay and address each of the following questions in complete sentences in at least two paragraphs . Provide specific suggestions for changes and improvements , rather than general observations

Is the introductory paragraph written effectively ? Why or why not

Does the thesis statement focus on a single point and meet the criteria of an effective thesis statement ? If not , what would you suggest to improve it

Are the essay 's ideas organized logically ? What ideas seem out of ?Are paragraphs developed with effective use of examples to support claims and key points (Body paragraph support materials are usually divided into examples , facts , statistics , anecdotes and expert testimony ? Where is more support needed

Does the essay reflect the use of the selected pattern of development effectively ? What suggestions would you recommend to improve the use of this mode

Are transition words used effectively ? In the essay , where would you suggest that transition words are needed

Is the concluding paragraph effective ? Why or why not

What errors do you notice in grammar and sentence structure ? Copy at least two sentence (s ) which contains errors , and briefly explain these errors to your peer

In your own words

uni1 project

The inclusion of `green awareness (i .e . knowledge about how to monitor tire pressure on a regular basis , not to accelerate or brake abruptly or not to carry unnecessary weigh in the back of a car ) in the driving test has been a controversial subject . The government has introduced this measure with a clear intention to reduce emission and make the U .S economy more sustainable . However , it is not clear what effects this policy will have on automotive industry

At one hand , this policy is likely to have a positive impact on automotive industry , since it will reduce drivers ' expenses on fuel Given that rising fuel prices are a major deterrent for citizens in terms of purchasing new cars , eco-driving might alleviate the perception of driving as a luxury . Thus , the demand for new cars will be stable this , in turn , will keep automotive production rates stable

Furthermore , eco-driving...