`Our modern concept of `race` and `racism` in America is highly influenced by 19th and 20th century ideas of `race`.`

Peer Editing Worksheet

Drafts for peer editing are due in class Wed , April 9 , 2008 bring two copies of your , since two students will write peer responses to your

read through this worksheet and read through the when you have finished reading , answer these questions for the writer explain your answers fully . Remember that helping your partners re-think and perhaps re-structure their s is more important than helping proof-read

The peer response is due in class on Wed , April 16 , 2008 . bring two copies of your peer response , on for

your peer and one for your T .A

Peer response by for

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1 . What do you understand to be the writer 's main argument

The writer 's main argument is that race is a subject of identity

2 . Is this argument prominently and clearly set out

The argument is prominently and clearly set out

3 . Choose one or two pieces of textual evidence which the writer uses effectively to support this claim . Note below both where they occur and why they 're effective

It is important to also note the difference in how Umbricius , and Juvenal , use race instead of other forms of discrimination . This piece of evidence is effective because it shows and gives credibility to the author 's essay

4 . Could evidence have been used more effectively ? Are there areas where evidence is missing , or where evidence is given without being tightly related to the argument

Evidence could not have been used more effectively . There are no areas where evidence is missing or where it is given without being tightly related to the argument . All evidence given supported the arguments and points presented in the essay

5 . Does the in which the writer develops her /his argument make sense to you ? Can you suggest any ways in which re-structuring the would strengthen it

The in which the writer develops the argument makes sense . The arguments flow freely . They are not confusing and are easily understood The writer could perhaps have compared and contrasted the various ways that Greeks and Romans alike viewed racism

6 . Does each paragraph make a distinct and coherent point ? Is the point of each paragraph clearly related to the 's main claim

Each paragraph makes a distinct and coherent point . The point of each paragraph is related to the main idea , and is easily understood

7 . Is there a paragraph in which you , as the reader , get lost or become confused about the overall direction of the argument ? What can the writer do to make this paragraph more fully connected to the main points

There is no regard to one being civilized or barbarous , for the Greeks were as civilized ' as the Romans were in Rome , save for the matter they were not from Rome that they lose credibility and benefits . To me this paragraph created some confusion , as I do not think it was necessary to incorporate this into the...