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Computer technology is growing faster than any other technology Unfortunately , because of all the advancements , the internet seems to favor the technologically elite . My grandmother , an eighty-four year old retiree , has no interest in learning how to use the internet , but she loves reading her favorite news and magazines on her old , yet comfortable , Lay-Z-Boy recliner . Many people , especially retirees , don 't have the know-how , or the resources to use the internet

The central idea of the paragraph particularly points out that the internet is among

the most elite innovations of communication and technology today . Through this particular claim , the paragraph further develops the idea that people are indeed getting best involved with the process through being directly affected by its influences even those who are having less knowledge about the said development in the collaboration of technology and communication

Obviously , the paragraph better claims that even retirees who are likely to have less interest in being involved in the said procedure of development are even targeted as the primary users of the system . Most likely , this is because of the fact that the old-aged retirees are in need of being comfortable in their own convenient time and space as they are being served with the best informations that they ought to receive during most of their times

To further improve the paragraph , the part on how the old-retirees in connection with the development of the communication and technology system are served with their values of concern should be well developed With evidences such as statistical data that would assist the readers see the implication of the matter in real life , the paragraph would better show the truth rather than simple opinions on the subject being presented

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Computer technology is growing faster than any other technology Unfortunately , because of all the advancements , the internet seems to favor the technologically elite . My grandmother , an eighty-four year old retiree , has no interest in learning how to use the internet , but she loves reading her favorite news and magazines on her old , yet comfortable , Lay-Z-Boy recliner . Many people , especially retirees , don 't have the know-how , or the resources to use the internet . However although this is true , it could not be denied that even though they are already old and retired , they are still noting to have a perfect pattern of service given to them as their comfort is being well noted as part of the provision of the said service . For this reason , although they have lesser knowledge about the system , they are more than appreciative of the fact that the said system of communication is developed for their comfort and benefit

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Commercials have many different purposes , but the one thing they have in common is the way in which they try to intimidate you into buying their product . There are many different approaches they use but basically they are appealing to a particular audience . By using certain things such as humour , animals and appealing...